OPIC Script Grammer check (Topic_ Holiday)
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Question : Choose a holiday and discuss how the celebrations have changed over the years.
Compare the past and present. What things are the same? What things are different?
Let’s talks about a Chuseok. It’s Korean Thanksgiving Day.
As far as remember, when I was young my family used to go to grandfather’s house.
At that time, all my relatives gathered together.
I thought, it was a great time because I met all my cousins and played all day.
However, as I’ve gotten older, the custom of Chuseok has changed.
Some of my relatives don’t come to my grandfather’s house.
I still went to my grandfather’s house with my family, others relatives traveled with their family or stayed home for relaxing during the Chuseok.
But one thing that hasn’t changed is that we still eat the SONGPAEN
In the past, we always made a SONGPAEN by ourselves,
Nowadays, we bought ready-made SONGPEAN in the mart.
Because I like 송편, I’m still looking forward to Chuseok
Compare the past and present. What things are the same? What things are different?
Let’s talks about a Chuseok. It’s Korean Thanksgiving Day.
As far as remember, when I was young my family used to go to grandfather’s house.
At that time, all my relatives gathered together.
I thought, it was a great time because I met all my cousins and played all day.
However, as I’ve gotten older, the custom of Chuseok has changed.
Some of my relatives don’t come to my grandfather’s house.
I still went to my grandfather’s house with my family, others relatives traveled with their family or stayed home for relaxing during the Chuseok.
But one thing that hasn’t changed is that we still eat the SONGPAEN
In the past, we always made a SONGPAEN by ourselves,
Nowadays, we bought ready-made SONGPEAN in the mart.
Because I like 송편, I’m still looking forward to Chuseok
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