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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 03. 09 조회 12582

OPIC Script Grammer check (Topic_ movie)

작성자: 1102013556 담당 튜터: Rebecca2
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Please tell me about the most memorable movie you’ve ever seen. What was it about? Who was in it?

I am big fan of romance movies, so I go to movie at least once a month.
I have watched many romance movies, among than the most memorable movies was that Nothinghill
It was about to true love story, between top star in Hollywood and normal man who lives in Nothinghill in England. The reason why I like Nothinghill is that my favorite actor has starred in the movie. One actor is Hugh Grant, he was very handsome, attractive in that movie
the other actor is Julia Roberts. She has lovely and beautiful smile.
Especially, I like its sound track ‘she’ whenever I feel depressed, I often watch this movie.
It helps me to get rid of my stress.
If you haven’t watched this movie, I strongly recommend you to watch it. It is such a masterpiece.
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Please tell me about the most memorable movie you’ve ever seen. What was it about? Who was in it?

I am big fan of romance movies, so I go to movie at least once a month.  (I go to the cinema)

I have watched many romance movies, among than the most memorable movies was that Nothinghill (among them the most memorable movie was Notting Hill)

It was about to true love story, between top star in Hollywood and normal man who lives in Nothinghill in England.  (about a true love story, between the top star in Hollywood and a normal man)

The reason why I like Nothinghill is that my favorite actor has starred in the movie.  (my favorite actor starred)

One actor is Hugh Grant, he was very handsome, attractive in that movie.  (very handsome and attractive)

The other actor is Julia Roberts.

She has lovely and beautiful smile.  

Especially, I like its sound track ‘she’ whenever I feel depressed, I often watch this movie.  (I like the song "She" from the soundtrack, and whenever I feel depressed)

It helps me to get rid of my stress. 

If you haven’t watched this movie, I strongly recommend you to watch it. It is such a masterpiece.

 

Good job with your writing assigments, I am quite impressed.  Keep up the good work :)

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