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OPIC Script Grammer check (Topic_ TV Show)

작성자: 1102013556 담당 튜터: Rebecca2
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Question : How has your interest in TV shows changed throughout the years?
How are the shows you watched in the past and the shows you currently
Watch different from each other?

Well, let me talk you about comedy TV shows between old and now.
When I was young I watched the TV shows that studio shooting and the scope of stories was very simple and some childish.
Moreover, the actors of comedy TV shows appeared on only comedian. However, as I’ve gotten older, the style of comedy TV show has changed.
Nowadays, the most popular comedy shows are reality comedy show of the outdoor shooting.
Also, I could watch the variety actors such as movie star, singer and so on.
Personality, I think the comedy show is more enjoyable than one.
So it is best way to relieve my stress.
튜터 교정 답변

Question : How has your interest in TV shows changed throughout the years?
How are the shows you watched in the past and the shows you currently
Watch different from each other?

Well, let me talk you about comedy TV shows between old and now.  (let me tell you)

When I was young I watched the TV shows that studio shooting and the scope of stories was very simple and some childish.  (shows that were shot in the studio)     (some were childish)

Moreover, the actors of comedy TV shows appeared on only comedian.  (comedy TV shows, or stand-up comedy)

However, as I’ve gotten older, the style of comedy TV show has changed.  (shows have changed)

Nowadays, the most popular comedy shows are reality comedy show of the outdoor shooting.  (shows that are shot outdoors)

Also, I could watch the variety actors such as movie star, singer and so on.

Personality, I think the comedy show is more enjoyable than one.  (personally)     (others)

So it is best way to relieve my stress.  (it is the best way)

 

Good job on this assignment!!

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