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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 03. 16 조회 13017

Appointment 2

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
As you might know, I am working as system enginner. I have a lot of colleges also those are my clients. So I make many appointment while I work in my office every weekdays. Acually last Thursday I made an appointment with my colleges. We met to discuss for our new system. Thay told to me their asking. It was terrible for me. The works were pretty a lot. So I persuaded to reduce the works. I said that if I were you, I'd first do important works. I'd later do less important job. We were talking about it for a long time. At last I got the persuasion from them. I was really proud myself. Also they had satisfied. After all, right now I expect the project work out. We made an appointment to see again next thursday. Therefore we leaved conference room with happy each other.
튜터 교정 답변

As you might know, I am working as a system engineer. I have a lot of colleagues, also those are my clients. So I make a lot of appointments while I work in my office every weekdays. Actually last Thursday, I made an appointment with my colleagues. We met to discuss our new system. They asked me some questions. It was terrible for me. The works were pretty a lot. So I persuaded to reduce the works. I said that if I were them, I'd first do important works. I'd later do less important job. We talked about it for a long time. At last, I got the persuasion from them. I was really proud of myself. Also, they were satisfied. After all, I expect the project work out. We made an appointment to meet again next Thursday. We left the conference room with satisfaction with each other.

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