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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 03. 28 조회 13033

Concert 1

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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Acually, a couple month ago, I went to Gyongi province Art center with my wife to see a musical named 명성왕후 who was the last queen in the Joseon Dynasty. I needed to celeberate my wife's birthday. We first time saw a musical. Gyongi province Art center is located in Ingedong in Suwon. It's near my place. It took 10 minutes on foot from my apartment. It's in the middle of city. So you can get there easy and convince. It had 2 small stages and 1 big stage. Also it has spacious parking lot. The concert hall was not as big as I expected, but it was elegantly decorated with lots of lights and comfortable seats and pretty good sound system. The musical was really awesome and everything was totally wonderful. It was the best experience ever.
튜터 교정 답변

Actually, a couple of months ago, I went to Gyongi province Art Center with my wife to see a musical named 명성왕후, who was the last queen in the Joseon Dynasty. I needed to celebrate my wife's birthday. It was our first time to see a musical. Gyongi province Art Center is located in Ingedong in Suwon. It's near to my place. It takes 10 minutes on foot from my apartment. It's in the middle of our city. So you can get there easily. It has 2 small stages and a big stage. Also, it has spacious parking lot. The concert hall is not as big as I expected, but it is elegantly decorated with lots of lights and comfortable seats and a pretty good sound system. The musical was really awesome and everything was totally wonderful. It was the best experience ever.

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