Concert 2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
7 years ago, I and my family went to amusment part named Everlend. It was so populer in my country. We were in the low to watch dolpin show. There are so crowded with people to watch the concert. At that time, my first son was really youger. He was 5 years old. I just cared for my daughter. I and My wife didn't care of my son. When we entered the concert, I and my wife and my daughter just came in. When we sat down our seat, at last we found out there is nothing my son there. We were so suprized. We got so upset and wrried. At once, We went out the concert to find our son. We didn't find our son for a long time, 30 minutes later, we could find our son. He was crying because of scarred also. When we found him, he got into watching game beside vidio arcade game machine. After we found him, we got stable. We couldn't watch the dolpin concert, but we didn't feel sorry about missing that. I told him it doesn't matter. And then I gave him Ice-cream. He recoved his mind. I think this is my memorable experience about a concert.
튜터 교정 답변
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