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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 09 조회 14306

Essential Product When you go business trip.

작성자: 1101091787 담당 튜터: JJ
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My business trip are usually short, so I don't pack too much into my suitcase.
I wear a suit when travelling, and in my suitcase I include some clean clothes, such as
business suits and neckties. I pack personal grooming items, such as hairbrush and toothbrush. Naturally, I take mt laptop and some business papers. but most of these will be in my carry-on bag My wife somtimes puts some cup noodles in my case, because she
worries about me eating well when I'm oversea.
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My business trip are usually short, so I don't pack too much into my suitcase. I wear a suit when travelling, and in my suitcase I include some clean clothes, such as business suits and neckties. I pack personal grooming items, such as hairbrush and toothbrush. Naturally, I take mt laptop and some business papers. but most of these will be in my carry-on bag My wife somtimes puts some cup noodles in my case, because she worries about me eating well when I'm oversea.

 

CORRECTION:

 

1. My business trip are usually short, so I don't pack too much into my suitcase.

> My business trips (plural - put "s") are usually short, so I don't pack too much into my suitcase.

2. Naturally, I take mt laptop and some business papers.  but most of these will be in my carry-on bag

> Normally, I take my (spelling) laptop and some business papers (no period)  but most of these will be in my carry-on bag

3. My wife somtimes puts some cup noodles in my case, because she worries about me eating well when I'm oversea.

> My wife sometimes (spelling)  puts some cup noodles in my case, because she worries about me when I'm overseas.

 

Hi Jeong,

Job well done. You have less errors this time. Wow, you are really improving. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to hear from you again. Take care! ^^,

 

Teacher Jj

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