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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 04. 04 조회 13960

park

작성자: 800136 담당 튜터: Ashley2
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There is a park near my apartment. It used to railroad that trains run from Yongsan to Paju . Instead of the road on the land the train runs under the land. There is a park along railroad. The park which is near my house was opened last year. There are several long path. It was covered with cement so it's covenient to ride bicycle and take a walk. It's warm. I can see cherry blossoms outside windows. It is beautiful. I like this cuty park.
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Hi Park, 

I have put all of your corrections in bold. One thing to remember is to always keep the same verb tense (past, present and future). Let me know if you have any questions.

 

There is a park near my apartment. It has a railroad track that runs from Yongsan to Paju .The train runs underground.  There is a park along  the railroad. The park which is near my house was opened last year. It had several long walking paths. It was covered with cement which was covenient for riding bicycles and taking  walks. When it was warm,  I could see cherry blossoms outside the windows. It was beautiful. I liked this cute park.

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