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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 04. 05 조회 14536

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수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
At that time I got married 22 years ago my husband’s family had 11 ritual ceremonies for their ancestors including(Lunar new year and Harvest moon holiday).
The items of ritual food wewe various and the pressing of cook was complicate.
I was very embarressed because I was not interested in cooking and I didn’t know what to begin.
But aunts came our home and prepared the ritual food.
After ancestral rites, my housand and I had to clean up till late night.
Our family thought that holding memorial services several times cost much money and consumed a lot of time and labor.
So we had considerated memorial services’reducing for a long time and concluded that we had them three times a year effectively.
But today, eldes brothers’wife of my husband go to the church, she doesn’t want to hold a memorial ceremony but can’t help but do that we prepare ritual food simple and holding thw memorial deremony is not harder than the past
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Great job, Rose! The edited text is below :)

When I got married 22 years ago, my husband’s family had 11 ritual ceremonies for their ancestors including(Lunar new year and Harvest moon holiday).
The items of ritual food are various, and the recipes were complicated.
I was very embarressed, because I was not interested in cooking and didn’t know where to begin.
But his aunts came to our home and prepared the ritual food.
After ancestral rites, my housand and I had to clean up unitl late in the evening.
Our family thought that holding memorial services several times cost a lot of money and consumed a lot of time and labor.
So we considered reducing  memorial services for a long time and concluded that we would only have them three times a year.
Today, my oldest brother in-law's wife goes to church. She doesn’t want to hold a memorial ceremony, but can’t help joining in when we prepare ritual food. Holding memorial ceremonies is much simpler these days.

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