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작성자: 1100632765 담당 튜터: Hunter1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When I was young, 4 seasons are distinct and I was happy living in this country.
Today is spring, the scenery outside the window in my office is green, the tree begin to bud and sky is blue and high.
I would like to take a trip to see the flower and renew my mental attitude.
But sometimes it may happen spring cold and temperature difference between day and night is great and people are likely to have a cold.
Summer is very hot and muggy so it’s not easy sleep deeply and work efficiently.
Most of workplaces have summer vacation to avoid the heat and to recover tired mind and body.
In fall, the leaves of tree change colorfuly and the weather is best.
Many people go on a trip to enjoy the autumn colors.
The festival is held throughout the country to please harvest.
Winter is very cold and children don’t go out home to play with.
Sometimes heavy snow fall down on the road and traffic flow is blocked but children enjoy the snowball fights and making a snowman.
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Great job, Rose! Review the edited text below :)

When I was young, the four seasons were distinct, and I was happy living in this country.
Now it is spring. The scenery outside the window in my office is green, the trees are beginning to bud, and the sky is blue.
I would like to take a trip to see the flowers and renew my mental attitude,
but sometimes spring is cold. The temperature difference between day and night is great, and people are likely to catch a cold.
Summer is very hot and muggy, so it’s not easy to sleep deeply and work efficiently.
Most workplaces have summer vacation to avoid the heat and to recover tired minds and bodies.
In fall, the leaves change colors, and the weather is the best.
Many people go on trips to enjoy the autumn colors.
A festival is held throughout the country to honor the harvest.
Winter is very cold, and children don’t go outside to play.
Sometimes heavy snowfall blocks traffic, but children enjoy snowball fights and making snowmen.

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