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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 04. 11 조회 12905

My town

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I live near Hongik University station. My neighborhood is exciting and crowded because it is located in the downtown where there are many coffee shops, clothing stores and pubs. It can be reached easily by subway and bus, so many people come and go every day. The restaurant where I like most is Bill Evans, the live jazz club. As you know, the name of the restaurant originally came from famous jazz pianist, Bill Evans. The reason I like the restaurant because not only the food is delicious and inexpensive but also I can enjoy live jazz music everyday. There is a large park along the Han river right next to my place, so I go there every weekend to play a saxphone. Spring is alreay in the towwn so it is really good for me to play jazz in the park. I like my neighborhood because it is exciting and calm at the same time.
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Wow! Your neighborhood sounds like a really great place :)

I live near Hongik University station. My neighborhood is exciting and crowded, because it is located downtown where there are many coffee shops, clothing stores and pubs. It can be reached easily by subway and bus, so many people come and go every day. The restaurant I like the most is Bill Evans, the live jazz club. As you know, the name of the restaurant originally came from the famous jazz pianist, Bill Evans. The reason I like the restaurant is because not only the food is delicious and inexpensive, but also I can enjoy live jazz music everyday. There is a large park along the Han river right next to my place, so I go there every weekend to play a saxphone. Spring is alreay here in my town, so it is really good for me to play jazz in the park. I like my neighborhood because it is exciting and calm at the same time.

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