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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 04. 12 조회 12653

Pet

작성자: 1100851732 담당 튜터: Danielle2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I own a puppy named Mong. He is a 5-year-old china Shih Tzu.

When I first saw him at a pet store, I immediately fell in love with him.

Mong has white fur with yellow spots on his body which makes him even cuter.

Whenever I gently pat him belly, he feels better.

I feed him twice a day, and wash him once a month.

Raising a pet requires a great deal of care and a big responsibility.

However, I don’t feel tired when I give Mong a bath or when I brush his teeth,

because he’s a part of myfamily.
튜터 교정 답변

I own a puppy named Mong. He is a 5-year-old Chinese Shih Tzu.

When I first saw him at a pet store, I immediately fell in love with him.

Mong has white fur with yellow spots on his body which makes him even cuter.

Whenever I gently pat his belly, he feels better.

I feed him twice a day, and wash him once a month.

Raising a pet requires a great deal of care and  responsibility.

However, I don’t feel tired when I give Mong a bath or when I brush his teeth,

because he’s a part of myfamily.

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