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I think that a healthy lifestyle is to live a well-regulated life.
Regular life is to sleep early and get up early
But modern life is complicated and we are living without having dinner with our family.
Nowadays transportation system is developing very much and people don't want to walk even at a stone's throw.
Modern people are lack of regular life and exercise.
Anybody has her own lifestyle. In my case, it's not easy to cut down on food and
I don't like to go at the gym to keep inI shape.
Instead I try to have a habit of walking if I have time.
Although it's not enough exercise, I who don't like to exercise, just walking is very meaningful for health.
It's important to reduce stress and think positively.
Every morning I pray to think God for my own life and make up my mind to help difficult(humble?) neighborhood
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Great job, Rose!!! I also think walking is great exercise :)

I think that a healthy lifestyle is to live a well-regulated life.
Regular life is to sleep early and get up early.
But modern life is complicated, and we are living without having dinner with our family.
Nowadays transportation systems are developing very much and people don't want to walk even at a stone's throw.
Modern people are lacking regular life and exercise.
Everybody has their own lifestyle. In my case, it's not easy to cut down on food, and
I don't like to go at the gym to keep in shape.
Instead I try to have a habit of walking, if I have time.
Although it's not enough exercise, walking is very meaningful for health.
It's important to reduce stress and think positively.
Every morning I pray to God for my own life and make up my mind to help my neighbor.

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