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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 04. 20 조회 13783

My New Year's Resolution

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I want to travel to Italy this year. I have never been to European countries before, so I think it will be the once-in-a-lifetime experience. When I go there, I will visit Venice, the city of water. I will take a gondola ride, eat seafood, and take lots of pictures. Also, I want to trip to Rome. Trip to Rome has been my dream after I read Roman Story which is famous Roman history book written by Nanami Shiono. I want to feel the acient Rome watching the Colosseum and the Theater. There are also many other things that I want to do. To go to Italy, I must save money to prepare traveling expenses and buy the ticket. I’m looking forward to going there very much.
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Great job, David. I've never been to Europe eiter. I would love to go one day :)

I want to travel to Italy this year. I have never been to European countries before, so I think it will be a once-in-a-lifetime experience. When I go there, I will visit Venice, the city of water. I will take a gondola ride, eat seafood, and take lots of pictures. Also, I want to go to Rome. A trip to Rome has been my dream since I read Roman Story, which is a famous Roman history book written by Nanami Shiono. I want to feel acient Rome by visiting the Colosseum and the Theater. There are also many other things that I want to do. To go to Italy, I must save money to prepare for traveling expenses and to buy the ticket. I’m looking forward to going there very much.

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