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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 05. 11 조회 13258

Camping 1

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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There are lots of amazing camping site across Seoul and Geonggi Province. However I can't think to remember name. Two years ago, my family and my friends went there. I just have memory which is nearly from my place. It took around 1 hour by car. There were greate streem and some bangalros. There were so population for Geonggi Provice people. After we unpack everything, first of all, we enjoyed going swimming and played water slide on the rock on nature. It was really funny. Second, we ate prepared meal and some frults for lunch. After we finished our lunch, we talked each other so much. And then we played soccer with male. Finally, we sat up tent and we had babequ party. And we had campfire. We shared the fun time and foods was so delicious. I naver forget a camping.
튜터 교정 답변

There are lots of amazing camping site across Seoul and Geonggi Province. However, I can't think of one. Two years ago, my family and my friends went there. I just have memory which is near to my place. It took around 1 hour by car. There were great stream and some bangalros. There was a  big population for Geonggi Provice people. After we unpack everything, first of all, we enjoyed going swimming and played water slide on the rock on nature. It was really fun. Second, we ate prepared meal and some fruits for lunch. After we finished our lunch, we talked with each other so much. And then we played soccer with male. Finally, we set up tents and we had a barbecue party. And we had campfire. We shared a fun time and the food was so delicious. I never forget our camping.

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