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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 05. 16 조회 12542

Camping 3

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Once I have desided to go camping, there are amount of things we have to prepare for my camping. First of all, I have to double check the weather which is camping day. The most important in camping day is weather. When I check the weather, I can usually use mobile application. Second, I make sure to pack everything I need. There are a lot of things such as emergency medicine, some tents, the whole set of kitchenware and so on. Lastly, I usually prepare groceries for our dinner party in outside. I like to eat barbecue party in our camping. That's the way I like it. And for I enjoy going camping, I have to make a camping list. Therefor, I can enjoy our camping.
튜터 교정 답변

Once I have decided to go camping, there are amount of things we have to prepare for our camping. First of all, I have to double check the weather for the camping day. The most important to consider in camping is the weather. When I check the weather, I usually use the mobile application. Second, I make sure to pack everything I need. There are a lot of things  I need to pack such as emergency medicine, tents, the whole set of kitchenware and so on. Lastly, I usually prepare groceries for our dinner party outside. I like to eat barbecue party in our camping. That's the way I like it. And because I enjoy going camping, I have to make a camping list. So that I can enjoy our camping.

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