help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
People do many works at the bank.
The most work to do is depositing and withdrawing money from their bank accounts.
Second, they pay taxes such as electrical bill, maintenance fee and so on.
Third, people can get loans at banks to buy houses and borrow living expenses.
But nowadays, young people don’t often go to the bank.
According to the internet development, people treat many works through the internet by computer or cellularphone those kinds of things.
In my case, I always do bank works through the internet.
I don’t need to waste time without waiting in line and I transact money regardless of time and place.
The most work to do is depositing and withdrawing money from their bank accounts.
Second, they pay taxes such as electrical bill, maintenance fee and so on.
Third, people can get loans at banks to buy houses and borrow living expenses.
But nowadays, young people don’t often go to the bank.
According to the internet development, people treat many works through the internet by computer or cellularphone those kinds of things.
In my case, I always do bank works through the internet.
I don’t need to waste time without waiting in line and I transact money regardless of time and place.
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