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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 05. 18 조회 11846

Takes in office 1

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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I am an introvert. I don't think my personality perfectly maches my job. But sometimes my job maches a few my personality. Usually I have to meet a lot of customer in my company. I need to talk about my job. They went me to work what they asked about system. I explain there are a lot of reasons I could work too hard. And I have to hear what they ask with patience. So I get stresses and I get tired. However, since my job is interesting and I lean a lot. I can say it's worthwhile. Since I feel a stress so much, I have to relieve my stress when I work in office. So I decided to have new hobby, I joined in-comany society of tennis club. I had to know so many people my tennis club. I could not only relieve my stress but also be health better then through new hobby. Right now I still love my job and I play tennis.
튜터 교정 답변

I am an introvert. I don't think my personality perfectly matches my job. But sometimes my job matches few of my personality. Usually I have to meet a lot of customers in my company. I need to talk about my job. They asked me to work when they asked something about the system. I explained it to them. There are a lot of reasons I could work too hard. And I have to listen to what they are asking with patience. So I get a lot of stress and I get tired. However, my job is interesting and I learn a lot. I can say that it's worthwhile. Since I feel stress so much, I have to relieve my stress when I work in the office. So I decided to have a new hobby, I joined in-company society of tennis club. I met so many people in my tennis club. I could not only relieve my stress but also I become healthier than before through my new hobby. Right now, I still love my job and I usually play tennis.

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