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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 05. 23 조회 12781

help, please

작성자: 1100632765 담당 튜터: Ivan1
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I always watch the news and read the newspaper.
The reasons are why I enjoy watching the news.
First, I want to know what happen in the country and world.
Through the news and newspaper, I know about many happenings and informations, like political, economic, social events.
sometimes those news help my job.
Especially I want to know what they are doing central government and other provinces.
If their policies are good, we make use of their strong point.
Second, I organize my thoughts by reading professionals’ editorial, critical article through the paper.
튜터 교정 답변

I always watch the news and read the newspaper.
The[se are the] reasons are why I enjoy watching the news.
First, I want to know what happen[ed] in the country and [throughout the] world.
Through the news and newspaper, I know about many happenings and informations, like [gain knowledge and information about] political, economic, [and] social events.
Sometimes those [the] news help[s me with] my job.
Especially I [especially] want to know what they are doing [in the] central government and other provinces.
If their policies are good, we make use of their strong point[s].
Second, I organize my thoughts by reading professionals’ editorial[s and other] critical article[s] through [in] the paper.

Hope this helps! Good job!

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