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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 13 조회 14196

Technology Dependence

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Hi Simon,

Today, I'd like to talk about 'Technology Dependence.'

How often do you hear someone ask, "What did you do before Smart-phones?"

One of the many answer is: we relied on our memories. Studies have shown that using our memories improves reasoning and creativity. Yet, because of our increased reliance on technology, few of us can even recall phone numbers or appointments. Try remembering and entering numbers by hand or picturing in your weekly calendar in your mind.

This will not only help you use your mind in a healthy way, but may save you when the inevitable happens and your Galaxy and iPhone goes down.

What do you think about this agenda?

Thanks for your answer in advance.

Jay
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Hi Simon, Today, I'd like to talk about 'Technology Dependence.' How often do you hear someone ask, "What did you do before Smart-phones?" One of the many answer is: we relied on our memories. Studies have shown that using our memories improves reasoning and creativity. Yet, because of our increased reliance on technology, few of us can even recall phone numbers or appointments. Try remembering and entering numbers by hand or picturing in your weekly calendar in your mind. This will not only help you use your mind in a healthy way, but may save you when the inevitable happens and your Galaxy and iPhone goes down. What do you think about this agenda? Thanks for your answer in advance. Jay

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[Corrections]

' How often do you hear someone ask, "What did you do before Smart-phones?"

→ How often do you hear this question from someone ? How was your life the time smart-phones were not yet invented? 

One of the many answer is: we relied on our memories.

 →Most of them answered this way :  We relied on our memories.

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Hi jay!

Technology wasn't invented for technology's sake. It was invented to make your life easier. It's supposed to help you spend more time living your life and less time sustaining it. Use it that way.Time is all you have. Use technology as a tool to enjoy more of your time instead of an obligation that takes you away from living your life.

 

Teacher Simon

 

 

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