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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 05. 31 조회 12629

Overseas busniss trip 1

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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I'd like to tell you about my first overseas business trip. 15 years ago, I first want to go on a business trip abroad. I want to china. Our company is pretty big company all over the world named SAMSUNG. Our company had a lot of branch office all over the world. Such as China, Euroup, America and so on. At that time, I developed a new maunewfacturing system by my self. Our coworker who he worked in china office. He saw my a new system. He asked me set up a new system at the china office. My boss ordered me go to China, I was told to China. I completed it sucessful. I first visited China and I never could speak Chiness. So I needed interpreter. I got to help interpreter. He helped me with work. He was very younger and smart. And he take me to attrection site for an weekend. I enjoyed seeing beutifull site. There was nothing inconvient. We took pictures with him. We spent happy time together. My first oversea busniess trip ended up being a very enjoyable one thank for him.
튜터 교정 답변

I'd like to tell you about my first overseas business trip. 15 years ago, I first went on a business trip abroad. I went to China. Our company is pretty big company all over the world named SAMSUNG. Our company has a lot of branch offices all over the world such as in China, Euroupe, America and so on. At that time, I developed a new manufacturing system by myself. My coworker who worked in China office saw my new system. He asked me set up a new system at China office. My boss ordered me to go to China, I was told to go to China. I completed it sucessfully. I first visited China and I couldn't speak Chinese. So I needed an interpreter. I got to talk to the interpreter. He helped me with my work. He was very young and smart. And he took me to attraction sites for the weekend. I enjoyed seeing beautiful sites. I didn't feel inconvenience. We took pictures with him. We spent happy time together. My first overseas business trip ended up being a very enjoyable one, thanks to him.

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