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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 06. 07 조회 12897

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These days, it’s hard to get a job for young people.
Youth unemployment rates are high and rising. If you luckily get the job, you would kick out from the company because the company is suddenly bad condition.
But the civil servants are guaranted retirement age so far, civil servants and teachers are popular jobs among young people although the salary is not high.
To be a civil servant and a teacher, you pass the written examination and then you are interviewed.
When interviewer interview the applicants, wthey take all sides into account.
First, they select people who are eager and responsible their job. If the circumsyance is difficult, those men could overcome in a crisis.
Second, they want people who go well with their colleagues.
The boss and colleagues don’t like be stubborn and self-assertive people.
튜터 교정 답변

Good job, Rose!

These days, it’s hard for young people to get a job.
Youth unemployment rates are high and rising. Even if you are lucky enough to get a job, there is no job security.
Civil servants, however, are guaranted retirement. Civil service and teaching are popular careers among young people, although the salary is not high.
To be a civil servant or a teacher, you must pass the written examination, and then you are interviewed.
When applicants are interviewd, they take all sides into account.
First, they select people who are eager and responsible. Interviewers like applicants with good crisis management.
Second, they want people who work well with others.
Bosses and colleagues don’t like employees who are stubborn and self-assertive.

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