help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I am using Samsung Galaxy S4 smartphone. A new product was released two and half years ago and I bought it.
The information search speed of the machine is fast and we can save time.
I am not interested in dealing with gadget, but I make use of a smartphone because it is a miniature of computer.
First, I always get the new informaton from my own smartphone. When I am wondering something, I can look for it on prompt.
Second, it’s good for me to listen English conversation or music through YouTube.
Third, it’s equipped with high-resolution camera, so if you want to take a picture, you could do it.
Nowadays, my colleagues make use of the map app.
The map app is upgraded every time. If you drive a car, you could find the street or destination.
The information search speed of the machine is fast and we can save time.
I am not interested in dealing with gadget, but I make use of a smartphone because it is a miniature of computer.
First, I always get the new informaton from my own smartphone. When I am wondering something, I can look for it on prompt.
Second, it’s good for me to listen English conversation or music through YouTube.
Third, it’s equipped with high-resolution camera, so if you want to take a picture, you could do it.
Nowadays, my colleagues make use of the map app.
The map app is upgraded every time. If you drive a car, you could find the street or destination.
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