help, please
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I enrolled Facebook 2years ago and treid to act in virtual space.
In my opinion, SNS is used private spaces or is advertised company’s products.
These days, politicians make the most use of SNS.
SNS has two-sides, good and bad points.
I sometimes learn many things and know strange people from SNS.
But some people use SNS badly and they supply wrong information.
My boss makes use of Facebook very well. He always uproads on it various kinds of talking.
Even if I am not with him, I can know what he is doing through Facebook.
In my opinion, SNS is used private spaces or is advertised company’s products.
These days, politicians make the most use of SNS.
SNS has two-sides, good and bad points.
I sometimes learn many things and know strange people from SNS.
But some people use SNS badly and they supply wrong information.
My boss makes use of Facebook very well. He always uproads on it various kinds of talking.
Even if I am not with him, I can know what he is doing through Facebook.
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