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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 06. 15 조회 13606

help, please

작성자: 1100632765 담당 튜터: Hunter1
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I’ve mentioned before, I am not good at machine, so I’ve always envied the man who take a picture very well.
In thirties years old, I bought a camera because I had a kid and would like to take pictures of my cute kid.
II took numerous pictures him at home and outside.
Recently, I took pictures with smart phone and it’has high-resolution camera.
Sometimes I looked pictures with my sons when they were young and told them the situation and background.
We really missed those days.
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Great job, Rose!

I’ve mentioned before, I am not good with machine, so I’ve always envied people who are good at taking pictures.
At thirties years old, I bought a camera, because I had a kid and liked to take pictures of my cute kid.
I took numerous pictures of him at home and outside.
Recently, I took some pictures with my smartphone. It has high-resolution camera.
Sometimes I look at pictures with my sons when they were young, and I tell them the situation and background.
We really miss those days.

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