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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 14 조회 12813

Neighbors and Friends

작성자: 1101080369 담당 튜터: Ruzel
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My parents grew up in a country side. They said, people are willing to help each other during the peak farming season. Furthermore, people helped each other to staty stong, even though bad things happen.
By the way, those who live in a city tend to be more individualistic. Such community oriented life is regarded as old fashioned life style. Nowdays, we don't care who live around ourslevs.

Thankfullym I have a good neighbors and friends, they are willing to help me if bad things take place. We have to keep in mind that human beings has been thrived because they knew how to live together.
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My parents grew up in a country side. They said, people are willing to help each other during the peak farming season. Furthermore, people helped each other to staty stong, even though bad things happen. By the way, those who live in a city tend to be more individualistic. Such community oriented life is regarded as old fashioned life style. Nowdays, we don't care who live around ourslevs. Thankfullym I have a good neighbors and friends, they are willing to help me if bad things take place. We have to keep in mind that human beings has been thrived because they knew how to live together.

 

CORRECTIONS:

people helped each other to staty stong, even though bad things happen. 

-> people helped  each other to stay strong, even thouh bad things happen.

 Nowdays, we don't care who live around ourslevs.

-> Nowadays, we don't care who live around us.

Thankfullym I have a good neighbors and friends, they are willing to help me if bad things take place. 

-> Thankfully, I have a good neighbors and friends who are willing to help me if bad things take place.

We have to keep in mind that human beings has been thrived because they knew how to live together.

-> We have to keep in mind that human beings has been thriving  because they knew how to live together.

 

COMMENTS:

Hi Daniel,

Thank you for writing. I can see that you used most of the words that you have learnd in you past lessons. You did great though there are some minor mistakes most specially in the spelling. You have to be careful because in writing spelling is one of the important thing. I am happy and impressed with you you wrote today. Thank you and have a great day!~^^

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