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Many countries in the world are suffering from food shortage.
Some developed countreis, obesity is social critical problems.
But underdeveloped countries in Africa and Asia, famine and malnutrition are also big issues.
These countries are not adjusted to cultivate crops because there are water shortage and hot weather but birth rates are increasing.
I think that if this trend is continued, food for mankind is short in the near future.
Some of global companies are developing GMO(genetically modified organizm)
GMO and crossbreed crops are different. GMO is good and bad points.
Someday, the scientiests will make simple food easily like capsule
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Great job, Rose!

Many countries in the world are suffering from food shortage.
In some developed countreis, obesity is a problem.
But underdeveloped countries in Africa and Asia have big issues like famine and malnutrition.
These countries have not adjusted cultivation, because there are water shortages and hot weather, but birth rates are increasing.
I think that if this trend continues, there will be a food shortage in the near future.
Some global companies are developing GMO(genetically modified organisms)
GMO's and crossbreed crops are different. GMO's have good and bad points.
Someday the scientiests will make food in the form of a capsule.

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