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수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
In Korea, our country had been under the monarchy for a long time.
After our country was independent from Japanese invasion, there was in a state of confusion.
At that time, coup happened, junta took power and controlled the press.
If the power is focus on one person and the period is long, the regime is accompanied with corruption.
In my second grade in university, many people especially university students including me demonstrated to destroy the military regime.
At last, Korea turns to real democratic country.
After our country was independent from Japanese invasion, there was in a state of confusion.
At that time, coup happened, junta took power and controlled the press.
If the power is focus on one person and the period is long, the regime is accompanied with corruption.
In my second grade in university, many people especially university students including me demonstrated to destroy the military regime.
At last, Korea turns to real democratic country.
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