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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 14 조회 12684

Listening to Music

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Well, I'd have to say that I'm quite into listening to music. What I wanna discuss here is one of the famous rock bands from this country, named YB. To be more specific, I'm really fond of their rock numbers that make me feel alive. As for a solo singer that I adore, you need to know that IU is my favorite at this moment. I guess the reason has something to do with the fact that she is not only a talented singer but also quite stunning guitar player. And, moreover, the fact that my daughter is a big fan of her might be another factor which I like her and her songs, which are mostly light but socially meaningful.
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Well, I'd have to say that I'm quite into listening to music. What I wanna want to discuss here is one of the famous rock bands from this country, named YB. To be more specific, I'm really fond of their rock numbers that make me feel alive. As for a solo singer that I adore, you need to know that IU is my favorite at this moment. I guess the reason has something to do with the fact that she is not only a talented singer but also quite stunning guitar player. And, moreover, the fact that my daughter is a big fan of her might be another factor which I like her and her songs, which are mostly light but socially meaningful.

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Sean, your composition is good, and I still suggest that you use standard English.

I will talk to you again later. Have a great day!

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