help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Korea has a serious social problem about multicultural family policy.
At past time(about 20 years ago), many bachelors in village couldn’t get married with Korean single women.
Because they didn’t want to live in village, so they got married foreign women of underdeveloped countries like Vietnam, Combodia, Philippin and so on.
But most cases, their merriage lives are unhappy.
The bridegrooms are much older than the brides, some are insane and others are disabled.
The brides don’t be provided any information about their spouses and they don’t speak Korean and know Korean culture.
These are very difficult to adjust their lives in Korea.
If they have their children, they don’t teach korean and living ways and these are affected another problems.
The international marriage which the couples don’tknow each other is a seed of unhappiness.
At past time(about 20 years ago), many bachelors in village couldn’t get married with Korean single women.
Because they didn’t want to live in village, so they got married foreign women of underdeveloped countries like Vietnam, Combodia, Philippin and so on.
But most cases, their merriage lives are unhappy.
The bridegrooms are much older than the brides, some are insane and others are disabled.
The brides don’t be provided any information about their spouses and they don’t speak Korean and know Korean culture.
These are very difficult to adjust their lives in Korea.
If they have their children, they don’t teach korean and living ways and these are affected another problems.
The international marriage which the couples don’tknow each other is a seed of unhappiness.
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