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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 07. 12 조회 13998

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If you go to a science museum, you can see robots.
The functions of those robots are simple. They walk front and back and their arms move up and down.
The more science is developing continuously, the more robot’s function is complex.
In the past, people didn’t use ther hands or feet from accident but now some cases robot arm or leg is replaced.
Robot’s appearance is pros and cons.
When the fire breaks out, the firemen extinguish fire in spite of danger, but scientists predict that if the robot fireman is made, fire fighting will be much easier than the present.
If science is more and more developing, men’s works will be replaced robots.
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Great job, Rose!!!

If you go to a science museum, you can see robots.
The functions of those robots are simple. They walk fowards and backwards, and their arms move up and down.
The more science continuously develops, the more complex robot functions get.
In the past, some people couldn't use their hands or feet after an accident, but now in some cases their limbs can be replaced with a robot arm or leg.
Robots' appearances have pros and cons.
When the fire breaks out, the firemen extinguish the fire in spite of danger, but scientists predict that if the robot fireman is made, fire fighting will be much easier than today.
As science develops more and more, human workers will be replaced by robots.

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