help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Many computers are attacked from hackers. Private users frequently check out whether the viruses invade their computers or not.
Most of companies and public officies are set up security systems to protect their informations, nevertheless the defense is broken.
A few years ago, one of the biggest banks in Korea was attacksd from hackers and many people were surprised at the news.
People thought that the banks had the best security systems.
My office’s computers are controlled by main computer, and the day of the security checks is designated and only approved media(usb) can be used.
Most of companies and public officies are set up security systems to protect their informations, nevertheless the defense is broken.
A few years ago, one of the biggest banks in Korea was attacksd from hackers and many people were surprised at the news.
People thought that the banks had the best security systems.
My office’s computers are controlled by main computer, and the day of the security checks is designated and only approved media(usb) can be used.
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