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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 07. 18 조회 13894

Introducing my family

작성자: 71876 담당 튜터: Adam1
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There are 3 members in my family. I’m married and have one daughter whose name is Soo Yeon.
Our family’s most important thing is the education of my daughter. She has been taking 5 private lessons like English, Mathematics, drawing , Playing Piano, Taekwondo. We can’t even go anywhere all together at Saturday morning because of my daughter’s private education.
I think there is great pressure on my daughter but my wife thinks my daughter have to manage it for the happiness in the future.
튜터 교정 답변

There are 3 members in my family. I’m married and I have one daughter whose name is Soo Yeon.
Our family’s most important priority is my daughter's education. She has been taking 5 private lessons: English, mathematics, drawing , piano, and taekwondo. We can’t even all go anywhere together on Saturday morning because of my daughter’s private education.
I think there is great pressure on my daughter, but my wife thinks my daughter has to manage it for her happiness in the future.

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