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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 07. 18 조회 15508

Please check my sentences gramatically (7.13)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Melanie1
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Yesterday I checked up my body to recognize how muscle and fat in my body.
I got how I have muscle and fat.
I expect my body healthier than now.

Newspaper is good material to get new information.
My job is needed to get much information.
I have to update information everyday.
Newspaper is a good tool to discuss with someone.

When I was in college, I used to read newspaper as paper material.

If I have my son or daughter, I will train them by reading newspaper and discussing together.

Although time has run and technology have been developed, newspaper delivers still remain.
Because there are quite a few people that prefer to paper material instead of articles on PC or smartphone.

If North Korea has nuclear, there is risk that war break out.
Even though Korea and US try to north korea give up nuclear, they wouldn't back out of their terrible weapon.

In Korea, there are tons of investor from other contries.
Much money will go out from korea because of war risk.
튜터 교정 답변

Yesterday I checked my body fat and muscle mass.
I now have muscle and fat in my body.
I expect my body will be healthier now.

Newspaper is good material to get new information.

Its my job to get information.
I have to update information everyday.
Newspaper is a good tool to discuss with someone.

When I was in college, I used to read newspaper.

If I have a son or daughter, I will train them to understand events in the wprld by reading the newspaper and discussing it together.

Even though you can read the news online, you can still get a newspaper.
There are quite a few people that prefer a paper newspaper instead of reading it online.

If North Korea has nuclear, there is risk that war could break out.
Even though Korea and US try to get North Korea give up nuclear testing, they wouldn't back down.

In Korea, there are tons of investors from other contries.
Much money will be spent because of the risk of war.

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