help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Many young Korean dispatched troops to Vietnam War.
Some people around me are suffering pain even now and a few of them are suffering from long-term effects of exposure to defoliants.
Government tries to help them.
If a war is broken(I don’t even think about) I shoud naturally some role.
Two or three times a year, government do virtual simulation training and we perform our roles to preparing for war.
Yoy know, young men in Korea have to serve in the military.
in the past, they were gained special benefit(after army, they got jobs easier than others) but the court judged that it was not equal between men and women.
So now, although after the military, young men don’t get extra points.
Some people around me are suffering pain even now and a few of them are suffering from long-term effects of exposure to defoliants.
Government tries to help them.
If a war is broken(I don’t even think about) I shoud naturally some role.
Two or three times a year, government do virtual simulation training and we perform our roles to preparing for war.
Yoy know, young men in Korea have to serve in the military.
in the past, they were gained special benefit(after army, they got jobs easier than others) but the court judged that it was not equal between men and women.
So now, although after the military, young men don’t get extra points.
튜터 교정 답변
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