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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 07. 21 조회 13227

Introucing my friends

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Let me tell you about my friends Park and Jeon. We met when carrying out a big project 15 years ago. We always stuck together like ‘The three Musketeers’ at that time. We’ve met a couple of times a month since that. We are of the same age and have IT-relevant jobs and similar hobbies. Jeon and I are married but Park is single. Jeon and I want Park to be married but Park is likely to remain single.
First we have dinner with small wine and then play billiards for second round drinking.
We love to drink and used to go to 3 bars one night but, as we grow order we become to go back home early in the evening.
There is nothing we can do to stop the time.
튜터 교정 답변

Let me tell you about my friends Park and Jeon. We met when carrying out a big project 15 years ago. We always stuck together like ‘The three Musketeers’ at that time. We’ve meet a couple of times a month since then. We are of the same age and all have IT-relevant jobs and similar hobbies. Jeon and I are married but Park is single. Jeon and I want Park to be married but Park is likely to remain single.
When we go out, first we have dinner with a small amount of  wine and then we play billiards during a second round of drinking.
We love to drink and we used to go to 3 bars in one night, but as we've grown older we've started going back home earlier in the evening.
There is nothing we can do to turn back time.

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