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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 07. 28 조회 14388

help, please

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I’ve never experienced smoking.
When I was a university student or a working beginner, many men around me smoked cigarettes.
But the harm of smoking is promoted continuously and cigarette priceses is risen double.
Two years ago, most of big buildings are designated non-smoking area. If they want to smoke, they have to enter the small smoking room or go out the building.
Recently, even bus stop is non-smoking area.
Many people are obliged to quit smoking.
Government also helps these people and health center in county educates and treats the smokers.
So these days, there are not easy to find people smoking around me.
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Excellet job, Rose!

I’ve never smoked.
When I was a university student, or a junior employee, many men around me smoked cigarettes.
But the harm of smoking is promoted continuously and cigarette priceses have double.d
Two years ago, most of the big buildings were designated non-smoking areas. If they wanted to smoke, they had to enter a small smoking room, or go out the building.
Recently, even bus stops have become non-smoking areas.
Many people are obliged to quit smoking.
The government also helps these people and health centers in counties educate and treat the smokers.
So these days, it is not easy to find people smoking around me.

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