help, please
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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I’ve never experienced smoking.
When I was a university student or a working beginner, many men around me smoked cigarettes.
But the harm of smoking is promoted continuously and cigarette priceses is risen double.
Two years ago, most of big buildings are designated non-smoking area. If they want to smoke, they have to enter the small smoking room or go out the building.
Recently, even bus stop is non-smoking area.
Many people are obliged to quit smoking.
Government also helps these people and health center in county educates and treats the smokers.
So these days, there are not easy to find people smoking around me.
When I was a university student or a working beginner, many men around me smoked cigarettes.
But the harm of smoking is promoted continuously and cigarette priceses is risen double.
Two years ago, most of big buildings are designated non-smoking area. If they want to smoke, they have to enter the small smoking room or go out the building.
Recently, even bus stop is non-smoking area.
Many people are obliged to quit smoking.
Government also helps these people and health center in county educates and treats the smokers.
So these days, there are not easy to find people smoking around me.
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