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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 19 조회 14365

Bad habits

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Sometimes, i felt exausted after work and I put my clothes down the floor and jumps right into my bed. Then, my mom starts to nag at me. wow. I have been trying to make up my room regularay because my mom has zero tolerance against the dirty room. But when i get too much stress or exausted, i desperately need an execuse to let me feel better. Oddly, disarrangement gives me deep rest. haha :)
Sorry mom.
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Sometimes, i felt exausted after work and I put my clothes down the floor and jumps right into my bed. Then, my mom starts to nag at me. wow. I have been trying to make up my room regularay because my mom has zero tolerance against the dirty room. But when i get too much stress or exausted, i desperately need an execuse to let me feel better. Oddly, disarrangement gives me deep rest. haha :) Sorry mom.

CORRECTIONS:

i felt exausted after work and I put my clothes down the floor and jumps right into my bed. 

-> I felt exhausted after work and I put my clothes down the floor and jumps right into my bed. 

I have been trying to make up my room regularay because my mom has zero tolerance against the dirty room.

-> I am trying to make up my room regularly because my mom has zero tolerance against the dirty room.

But when i get too much stress or exausted, i desperately need an execuse to let me feel better. 

-> But when I get too much stress or exhausted, I desperately need an excuse to let me feel better. 

 

COMMENTS:

Hi Daniel,

Thank you for writing again. Wow you can wrote really well. I am very impressed with your wiring and in the words that you used in your sentences. I can say that you just need to be careful with the correct spelling of the words because that is one of the important thing in writing. Always capitalize the letter "I in your sentences. 

I think your mother will not get angry but will laugh when she reads this...hahaha! Thank you again and have a nice day!~

 

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