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What do I write? (1)

작성자: 119940 담당 튜터: Love
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hello, Love.
I'm James.
Everyday I have been talking with u for 5 or 6 month.
Can u think of that?

Maybe I think we will talk with the topic of web 2.0.
Althlugh It is different to Web 2.0, i want to write about making a report.

These days I used to make so many reports everyday.
First of all, I prefer speaking or thinking alone to writing about some facts or anything.
But writing a report or analyzing some facts, I knew the power of pen is stronger than speaking and more useful tools than watching.
Because most of people can see the sentense or paper if he/she want, by using internet.
Some guys like to write his life story in the blog or homepages.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello, Love. I'm James. Everyday I have been talking with u for 5 or 6 month. Can u think of that? Maybe I think we will talk with the topic of web 2.0. Althlugh It is different to Web 2.0, i want to write about making a report. These days I used to make so many reports everyday. First of all, I prefer speaking or thinking alone to writing about some facts or anything. But writing a report or analyzing some facts, I knew the power of pen is stronger than speaking and more useful tools than watching. Because most of people can see the sentense or paper if he/she want, by using internet. Some guys like to write his life story in the blog or homepages.

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->  I have been talking with you everyday for 5 or 6 months.

-> Maybe I think we will talk with about the topic of web 2.0.

->  Although it is different to Web 2.0, I want to write about making a report.

-> These days, I'm used to making so many reports everyday.

-> However, writing a report or analyzing some facts, I knew that the power of pen is stronger than speaking and is more useful tools than watching.

-> Because most of people can see the sentence or paper if he/she wants by using internet, some guys like to write their life story in the blogs or homepages.

 

Hi James,

Thank you for submitting your composition. First, I'd like to explain about the corrections. All the corrections made are highlighted in blue. Any wrong capitalization, punctuation or misspelled words are underlined and unnecessary words or ideas are crossed out. yeswink

You're actually right James. We've been talking for quite some time now and you're doing really well in class. You're always expressive and cheerful, which is good. However, your grammar and vocabulary both need polishing, and one way you can do that is not just to speak, but write as well. By doing so, you can better see your corrections. Therefore, keep improving your speaking and writing skills by practicing. You may also refer to the book's topic for any unfamiliar words. It will help you develop your vocabulary.  See you in class!smiley

 

~Love^^

 

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