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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 10. 18 조회 14446

beach 1

작성자: credu_eykim7 담당 튜터: Kris1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I like going to the beach in the summer.
And I usually wear swimsuit and one piece.
A few years ago, I put on my short jean and T-shirt and I felt easy to play.
But after then, I got to know how it is difficult to do the laundry.
My clothes were soked up the seawater and full of sand. So I couldn't use washing machine and it's very difficult.
After this experience, I usually put on my swimsuit and one piece.
Nowadays many people wear the rash guard. It is long and sand is not clunged. next summer, I will buy and put on it.
튜터 교정 답변

I like going to the beach every summer.
And I usually wear swimsuit and one piece.
A few years ago, I put on my shorts jeans and T-shirt and I felt comfortable to play.
But after then, I got to know how it is difficult to do the laundry.
My clothes were soaked up in seawater and they were full of sand. So I couldn't use the washing machine.It was very difficult.
After this experience, I usually put on my swimsuit and one piece.
Nowadays many people wear rash guard. It is long and sand does not get stuck. next summer, I will buy and put it on.

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