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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 23 조회 13662

My neighbors

작성자: 71850 담당 튜터: Brooke
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My village name is MokRyun which is magnolia flower.
I live in an apartment. There 14 floors in the apartment and my house is on 7th floor.

Mainly, I often come across my neighbors in the elevator.
As I know, the husband is a school teacher and I don't know the wife's job.
I didn't ask there ages but they must be older than ours.
Actually we didn't have a chance to talk about the personal things.
Sometimes we give some presents like korean cake or special foods to them on special days
If possible, I like to have a chance to know each other. thanks
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My village name is MokRyun which is magnolia flower. I live in an apartment. There 14 floors in the apartment and my house is on 7th floor. Mainly, I often come across my neighbors in the elevator. As I know, the husband is a school teacher and I don't know the wife's job. I didn't ask there ages but they must be older than ours. Actually we didn't have a chance to talk about the personal things. Sometimes we give some presents like korean cake or special foods to them on special days If possible, I like to have a chance to know each other. thanks

 

1. My village name is MokRyun which is magnolia flower.

---> My village's name is MokRyun which means "magnolia flower."

2. There 14 floors in the apartment and my house is on 7th floor. 

---> There are 14 floors in the apartment and my house is on the 7th floor.

3. Actually we didn't have a chance to talk about the personal things.

----> Actually, we didn't have a chance to talk about personal the things.

4. Sometimes we give some presents like korean cake or special foods to them on special days If possible, I like to have a chance to know each other. thanks

----> Sometimes, we give some presents like Korean cake or special foods to them on special days If possible, I like to have a chance to know each other. Thanks.

 

Hi there Adrew!~^^

 

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-Teacher Brooke-^_^

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