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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 03 조회 15375

Business Trip

작성자: 119906 담당 튜터: Ida
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I've encountered a problem of delayed flight, so that, I'm afraid I couldn't attend the first meeting with the customers. I wish I could find another flight right now, but it seems there is no flight available at this moment. So, I believe I can consider several turnarounds. The first thing that I can come up with is I would call the customer's representative to explain this situation and ask postponing the meeting for one or two days. Another solution that I can consider is sending alternative person as a replacement of me. I guess Mr. Lee at Saudi Office might be able to commence the first meeting because he has a certain level of knowledge about our product. Even though he is a sales person rather than a technician, he would be able to make softer atmosphere with them, and also can derive some questions from the customers for which I can prepare the solutions and answer them. I think the second option might be more appropriate in connection with not cancelling the meeting schedule.
튜터 교정 답변

I've encountered a problem of delayed flight, so that, I'm afraid I couldn't attend the first meeting with the customers. I wish I could find another flight right now, but it seems that there is no flight available at this moment. So, I believe I can consider several turnarounds. The first thing that I can come up with is I would call the customer's representative to explain this situation and ask to postpone postponing the meeting for one or two days. Another solution that I can consider is sending  an alternative person as a replacement of me. I guess Mr. Lee at Saudi Office might be able to commence the first meeting because he has a certain level of knowledge about our product. Even though he is a sales person rather than a technician, he would be able to make softer atmosphere with them, and also they can derive some questions from the customers for which I can prepare the solutions and answer them. I think the second option might be more appropriate in connection with not cancelling the meeting schedule.

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Hi Sean, I just checked your composition. Please be mindful with your verbs. Be more consistent next time. Have a great day!

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