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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 05 조회 14486

My Mentor

작성자: pos600333 담당 튜터: Jasmine1
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In fact, I have no specific mentor in my business area. I am an ordinary biz-man, so it is difficult to find special famous men in this area. Nevertheless, I am respect following people.

First, I am honor of Seung-yup Lee, who is a Korean baseball super-star. His nickname is Home-run King and he has so many records relating to the hitter. He is famous for sincerity and his motto is that the true effort doesn't betray. I was impressed to the motto, and it became my motto, too.

Second is Mr. Myung-bak Lee, who was the last Korean President. He is a univ. alumnus with me. Before 30 years, he was a normal biz-men, too. However, he showed his ability in his jobs and became the CEO of the large company. Finally, he became the president after the course of the Congress member and the Mayer.

I want to effort like SY Lee and to success like MB Lee in the future.
튜터 교정 답변

In fact, I have no specific mentor in my business area. I am an ordinary busiessman, so it is difficult to find special, famous men in this area. Nevertheless, I am respect the following people.

First, I am honor of Seung-yup Lee, who is a Korean baseball super-star. His nickname is Home-run King and he has so many records related to hitting relating to the hitter. He is famous for sincerity and his motto is that the true effort doesn't betray. I was impressed to with the motto, and it became my motto, too.

Second is Mr. Myung-bak Lee, who was the last Korean President. He is a university alumnus with me. Before 30 years, 30 years ago he was a normal businessmen, too. However, he showed his ability in his jobs and became the CEO of the a large company. Finally, he became the president after the course of the  being a congress member and the Mayor.

I want to display effort like SY Lee and to successful like MB Lee in the future.

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1) Before vs. Ago
Before is for 2 events where 1 event happened BEFORE the other.
--> Before I went to university, I vacationed in Germany.
--> He was a member of congress before he became president.

Ago is for time.
--> 5 years ago I lived in a different house.
--> My wife and I got married 10 years ago.

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