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작성자: 1110171 담당 튜터: Elizabeth2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I ask you to confirm that the following sentences are correct.

Guide to Access Control at Aerospace Museum Observatory

Please note that access to the observatory is controlled for the safety of visitors due to the renewal of the aerospace museum observation deck.

Access control period: 2018.11.19 (Mon) to 2018.12.20 (Thu)
튜터 교정 답변

I ask you to confirm that the following sentences are correct.

Guide to Access Control at Aerospace Museum Observatory - Closing dates for the Observatory 

Please note that access to the observatory is controlled - maybe limited would be better for the safety of visitors due to the renewal - maybe maintenance of the aerospace museum observation deck.     I think you are trying to say "The Aerospace Museum Observatory will be closed due to maintence for safety purposes at the following time." - this is a common warning sign. 

Access control period: 2018.11.19 (Mon) to 2018.12.20 (Thu)

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