Importance of Volunteer-Ship in case of Big Natural Disaster.
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Before telling, I want to define "Volunteer-Ship" as the activity to heip people that had been damaged from the natural disaster.
When the natural disaster happen, so many people are damaged and the amount is so large. It means that it is impossible to help the damaged people with normal emergency programs or social welfare systems. It is needed lots of people to reconstruct collapsed buildings and supply foods or clothes for the damaged people.
These helps make people be united to the community firmly and we can have loyalty to our society with the beliefs that we can get the help form others when we have difficulty.
When the natural disaster happen, so many people are damaged and the amount is so large. It means that it is impossible to help the damaged people with normal emergency programs or social welfare systems. It is needed lots of people to reconstruct collapsed buildings and supply foods or clothes for the damaged people.
These helps make people be united to the community firmly and we can have loyalty to our society with the beliefs that we can get the help form others when we have difficulty.
튜터 교정 답변
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