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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 11 조회 15321

Neighbor

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
At past, our ancestors have a good relationship with neighbors. When they moved out to other place, they gave their neighbors rice cake to introduce themselves. Furthermore, they usually share food they made each other. But nowadays, that beautiful tradition has almost gone. Sometimes people look like making a fence in their heart against neighbors. That’s why we are very awkward when we come across neighbors. We don't care about neighbors anymore opposite our ancestors. Neither do I. I just greet to my neighbors when I meet them at specific place like elevator. We don't talk about anything special. Also, I am so busy, I usually leave my apartment early in the morning and come back so late at night. Therefore, I don’t have many chance to see my neighbors. I can see neighbors just only weekends. Someday, I want to have a decent conversation and good time with my neighbor.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! The article that you wrote was really good. Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

At past, our ancestors had a good relationship with their neighbors. When they moved out to another place, they gave their neighbors rice cake to introduce themselves. Furthermore, they usually share food that they made. But nowadays, that beautiful tradition is almost gone. Sometimes people look like they're making a fence in their heart against their neighbors. That’s why we feel awkward when we see our neighbors. We don't care about our neighbors anymore unlike our ancestors. Me too. I just greet my neighbors when I see them at specific place like on the elevator. We don't talk about anything special. Also, I am so busy, I usually leave my apartment early in the morning and come back so late at night. Therefore, I don’t have a lot of chances to see my neighbors. I can just see my neighbors only on weekends. Someday, I want to have a decent conversation and a good time with my neighbors.

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