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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 11 조회 14861

Self Introduction

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Hello, my name is Tae Hyoung Kim and my English name is Jake. I was born on September 1st, 1987, so I am in my late 20s. I work as a sales worker at Samsung SDS. My job is to introduce and sell our products to buyers and I have to be a people person to work well at my job. I have to meet many people for my job and I have to know a lot about our products so I could explain them to potential buyers. I must consider profit when I work as sales employee. Actually I’m a rookie so I don’t have any specific job. That’s why I’m nervous but I’m confident that I gonna be good rookie, even being a great role model to my juniors. I’m preparing when I’m charge of specific job. In my free time, I like to hang out with my colleagues. Also, I love to watch movies and go to nice restaurants with my family. We like to try new foods so I look up new places online. I’m an only child. I live with parents and 2 cousin sisters now. They are younger than me. We are close like real siblings.
튜터 교정 답변

Good morning Jake! You only had minimal grammar slips. Just continue doing this and I'm sure that you will improve a lot everyday. Good job! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

Hello, my name is Tae Hyoung Kim and my English name is Jake. I was born on September 1st, 1987, so I am in my late 20's now. I work as a sales worker at Samsung SDS. My job is to introduce and sell our products to buyers and I have to be a people person so that I can fit well to my job. I have to meet a lot of people for my job and I have to know a lot about our products so I could explain them to our potential buyers. I must consider the profit when I work as a sales employee. Actually I’m still a rookie so I don’t have a specific job title yet. That’s why I’m nervous, but I’m confident that I'm gonna be a good rookie, even being a great role model to my juniors. I always prepare when I’m in-charge of a specific job. In my free time, I like to hang out with my colleagues. Also, I love to watch movies and go to nice restaurants with my family. We like to try new foods, so I search for new places online. I’m an only child. I live with my parents and 2 cousins now. They are younger than me. We are close like real siblings.

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