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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 11 조회 13496

My New Year's Resolution

작성자: 1101160011 담당 튜터: Mitch2
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I want to travel to Indonesia Bali next year.
when I go there, I will visit Bali, eat every food, and takes lots of pictures, and to go surfing.
I learned a surfing last month.
so its very fun. I still to feel sea wave.
To go to bali, I must sve money to prepare traveling expensives and buy the ticket.
also I must bo study English very hard.
I'm looking forward to going there very mush.
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[CORRECTION]

I want to travel to Bali, Indonesia next year. When I go there, I will visit Bali, eat every food, take lots of pictures, and go surfing. I learned surfing last month. So it was very fun. I can still feel the sea wave. To go to Bali, I must save money to prepare traveling expenses and buy the ticket. Also, I must study English very hard. I'm looking forward to going there very much.

[COMMENT]

Hello, Aaron!

Thanks for writing about your New Year's Resolution. I would like to go to Bali, Indonesia too. It's a very beautiful place. It's like a paradise. I hope that you'll enjoy your vacation there. Anyway, kindly take note the corrections that I made for you above.

Have a nice day,

Teacher Mitch ^-^

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