I go to the hometown
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I am going to my hometown this holiday.
I am going to visit Seonyudo on the way
the island has a pretty sand beach, so it would be good for children to play
And there is also the famous Iseongdang bakery.
I was able to discover the beauty of seonyudo through internet search
if I go to the seonyudo , I want to walk on the sandy beach with my children
and when I get a chance, I want to go to a reataurant
I am going to visit Seonyudo on the way
the island has a pretty sand beach, so it would be good for children to play
And there is also the famous Iseongdang bakery.
I was able to discover the beauty of seonyudo through internet search
if I go to the seonyudo , I want to walk on the sandy beach with my children
and when I get a chance, I want to go to a reataurant
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